Ben Stovall

Decent story; needs a good editor

At its heart, this book has a decent story but it's in need of a good editor. Several scenes, especially fight scenes, feel drawn out unnecessarily, to the point that I began skimming to the end of them. The dialogue feels artificial, and the characters need to be fleshed out as individuals. I think there's potential for a good good book here, but it's a revision or two away from that in its current state.